A Fiery Gospel

[Little Brown Fox]

Yeah, it sometimes seems that FF does this kind of crap all the time. I've seen it happen before; missing names and phrases, and maybe even parts of sentences. :T

[Tetsuwan Penguin]

next chapter is up
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11420302/6/A-Fiery-Gospel

[Little Brown Fox]

I saw the notification on FF first, for once. :3 Gonna read it... (although still lowkey concerned about when Atom becomes involved in this, and what exactly will transpire from this- I have a fear...)

Edit: You misspelled "bide" as "bid" in one line; in another, you misspelled flour as "flower". There is occasional misspelling of "choose" as "chose", I've noticed. You accidentally referred to a plate glass window as a plate glass building; and there is a redundancy in one sentence: "If this was an ideal world I suppose I'd have handled things a bit differently, I suppose." You used "least" instead of "lest" in a sentence. You used "perusing" in a sentence where "pursuing" would have worked better (a typo?). You typo'd "hid" instead of "hide" in the sentence referring to a "submarine hack". Sometimes, I think I've noticed "it" being used in place of "if", and maybe vice versa- but in this instance, I'm more referring to the former. Also, missing quotation marks here and there. There are probably other phrasing errors here and there, but I either haven't found them, have forgotten them, or cannot properly articulate what is wrong. That, and I don't feel like logging every little thing; I don't want to be annoying, especially since my own spelling sometimes gets away from me. (of course, I think I just did log everything I noticed past the point I started at...)

Also, I have a horrible feeling that at least on person, maybe two, are either going to die, or come close to it, before the story's through. I thinking a catalyst; I'm stressed out...

Ironically, in most forms of my canon, Cobalt is the one that's more likely to commit homicide, for one reason or another...

[Tetsuwan Penguin]

Thanks for your notes, I'll go back and try to find all that.

Now don't take this the wrong way but I never got the idea from your stories that Cobalt might commit homicide, suicide however, maybe....

[Little Brown Fox]

Yes, well, that too. He's the least mentally stable of the lot.

[Tetsuwan Penguin]

Also, I have a horrible feeling that at least on person, maybe two, are either going to die, or come close to it, before the story's through.

I guess that I've already sort of implied that. DC comics would often run a 'what if' or 'AU' story in which major characters died or did things that they would normally never do. They would say however that "it never actually happened". For example, they must have run a few stories about Superman's death (in different ways at the hands of different foes). I'm not saying that's what I'm doing here, but I will probably never recall the events in this story in any other future story so it's the same idea.

Somehow I think what I'm doing here will be less objectionable than certain pairings of characters I've imagined in the past, and I promise I won't go THERE again.

[Little Brown Fox]

If you gank Reno I'm going to be very upset. :T

[Tetsuwan Penguin]

If you gank Reno I'm going to be very upset. :T

Reno is very much alive at the end of this story. However ......

Well actually, nobody you probably give a rat's tush about dies. Unless ..... Na, NOBODY likes them!

[Tetsuwan Penguin]

Just a few thousand words away from Novel length now.


https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11420302/7/A-Fiery-Gospel

[Little Brown Fox]

... *squints at u* I don't trust you, man... but... *reads anyways*