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As you may or may not know, I have posted a collection of short stories and random drabbles to Fanfiction.net. I have just added a new story to that collection (such as it currently is):

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/9393449/1/27

The first chappie is just pointless angst based on some of my Cobalt-headcanons. The next one is much more lighthearted, and may actually become a real story, provided I get enough support and can think of enough ideas for it.

I'll have to read it again later when I have time to really let it soak in. You write very well but your use of language is so intense I really need all my gray matter to be on line to not miss anything. Hope you weren't up all night working on this. Then again what's summer vacation for?

Ahhhh - Tetsuwan Penguin says the same thing -- you pack a lot of punch into your writing - EXCELLENT story going with this "chapter" - it deserves to be continued!

Reading comprehension was always what I was best at. Even though I tend to forget the definitions of words I don't use often (if at all), if I come across them again, or suddenly remember them, I look them up in my dictionary again to confirm it. It's actually a seriously annoying habit of mine, but I can't stop, not really; my obsessive need to know my words is probably one of my healthier compulsions (heck, it's probably the only positive one, if not exactly technically healthy), anyway, though.

Edit: April, in regards to your latest review...
I do agree that I need to break up my paragraphs better, in order to make them flow more naturally and easier to read. However, the way you have it, while good, makes each "paragraph" too short! I am a fan of nice, big, long paragraphs; anything too short looks childish and amateurish.