A Fiery Gospel

[Little Brown Fox]

I thought it was "Nanowrimo" (National Novel Writing Month)? Eh. Different strokes for different folks.

I don't think I disliked the story that you gave. It's just that it ended in an unsatisfying way, at least to me. It also feels like more could have been done with it; I often feel both of these things when it comes to your stories, as awful as it is to say. I like to read them, but they are ultimately unfulfilling. That's just how I feel; they have the potential to be more, but seldom ever are. Sadly, it isn't terribly unexpected, after a point. Sorry...

Btw, how old were they supposed to be, even? Atom was in middle school, and references were made to the passage of time.

Another thing that bothers me is the improbability of the plot; granted, it seems to borrow its canon from multiple canon sources, but some of what is described in the plot, and what I know about certain details of the canon that certain characters and/or parts are borrowing is incongruent. Like Tenma's attitude, for instance; or even Atlas' and Tokugawa's, for that matter. My point being, they were all a lot better about what they were doing by the time of the series' end. (although I'm not too sure about Atlas; as I recall he wasn't shown...) Sure, Tenma was damaged, but he clearly saw his mistakes for what they were.

Idk; I'm being overly analytical over what I now learn is apparently vent writing, I guess.

Also, most of your stories don't seem to be connected in any way, anyways, barring the clearly marked exceptions. That reminds me, you started out with that AU that you had stories you were still going to write for...

I'm trying to write something right now, actually; but I'm not sure if it's something I'll share with the community at large, even if I actually finish it and it turns out well. I'm kind of self-conscious about this one.