*sigh* My other doujin didn't go very well. But! (>_<) I am making another Doujin! *silence...* Er, uh, would anyone (anyone?) like to read it? there are only a few pages so far, but I'm trying really hard to be a better amateur Managa-ka! I even have Manga pens now, and a how-to-draw manga book! Please, read my new Doujin! (*on hands and knees*) ;_;
The new Doujin will also be a fan fiction. (so if the doujin ain't great, the fan fiction could be better!)
PLOT: ( Please understand that I am not very organized right now. I it night time, and I am feeling really nervous!)
Uran is getting bullied at school. /not too bad, I don't want to story to be too bad. Then again, if this story was rated, it would probably be PG-13 (then again, the drawings wont be to gory...)/
Uh, anyways! (I'm so nervous! :O ) Astro, Cobalt, and Uran get upgraded into more super... super robots! Then, Uran is murdered! By a monster.
After Astro and Coablt find their sister nearly dead, they are angered. Uran gives Cobalt her memory card before she dies.
When she does die, Uran is taken to the robot heaven by a electronic robot angle. Astro and Cobalt protest.
Astro and Cobalt set out to avenge their killed sister. They travel though the Land of Sweets, the Park of Fright, and last, to the Forest of Memories!
When (if anyone actually reads this) I post, or put a link to my doujin, I would like for some advice on how to fix my drawings, plotting, or writing. If anyone just wants to read it fine. You don't even have to be an expert on Manga, just tell me what I have written or drawn wrong. For example, if I wrote a word wrong, point it out. Part of becoming a good manga-ka is to be criticized, no matter how much it hurts, right?
(Gawd, I'm so nervous! I'm afraid no one would read this... I'm so frustrated! :cry

EDIT: I didn't want to have to make a new thread... Er, I hope someone read this. @__@