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Postby astro_mcfly » 20 years ago

Hello everybody! I have written a little bit of a fan fiction story. Hope it's not to bizzare or weird. Anyways, here it is



In the United States, there is a city, half industrial, half restaurants called Livonia. This particular city wasn’t spectacular at all, but here, in southeast Michigan lived a thirteen year old girl named Natarii Horubafu of Ohioan decent.
She wasn’t really good at much; she couldn’t even skate backwards on ice. Besides that, she was an artist, and was quite a good driver for her age.
Her hair was orange at the ends, but gradually turned to brown. Her eyes were a beautiful blue-green color that changed with different amounts of light.
On this particular day in the year 2005, she ran out of the front door, crying hard, and jumped into a maroon colored, shiny English motorcar from 1958. As the tears came down her face, she yanked hard on the starter, and shifted into reverse.
“I won’t let him ruin my day.” She said quietly as she slowly let off the brakes and shifted into first. She let go of something she was holding, and gently lowered it onto the passenger’s seat.
Looking closely, you could tell it was a manga by Osamu Tezuka; Astro Boy.
As the automobile gained speed, her hair began to rise up slowly, like a flag before a storm. She wiped the tears from her eyes with a light brown sleeve.
“Sometimes I wonder,” She thought, “Could things be better somewhere else? Is there someone somewhere who wouldn’t mind helping me out?

In that very same city, on that very same Harrison Street, there was a certain woman of special interests. She was called Dr. Mockingbird, of course, shortened from the actual Doctor Nora Vivian Mockingbird. Dr. Mockingbird, a Canadian engineer of new technologies, decided to shoot signals from a strange radar contraption that looked somewhat like a bicycle (certainly covered) with numerous gauges and dials held onto the devise with small metal tie straps.
This bizarre equipment was the best system ever, tracking farther, and even higher and deeper than a bicycle looking thing should. Or any devise used for that particular function.

As Natarii drove down the street, Dr. Mockingbird was not ready for the quite possible, a system malfunction in this “Scientific Wonder” that she designed.
She flipped the switch, and…
As soon as it happened, the machine blew to pieces, and strange fumes filled the air. When they vanished for good, Natarii’s car had left the neighborhood, or shall I say, her world as she knew it.

As soon as Natarii had regained feeling, she looked about her. She was, for certain, not where she belonged. Her automobile sped down the street… “What?!” She gasped, as she noticed something quite different than her usual view of big cities. The buildings were enormous, and balloons soared high in the sky, delivering the news of the day. All of the automobiles around her, well… Were made with the capabilities of flight.
The automobile she was driving turned slightly. But Natarii still had no concept about what was to happen next. She saw bright lights, and they temporarily deprived her of her vision. Her hands, sweaty with fright, slipped completely off the steering wheel.
What she couldn’t see; a truck coming her way. It was too late. Kersmash!
She screamed aloud as she was hurled through the glass windshield of her car.

But there was then a both weird and bizarre series of events that occurred after that.
A man who happened to be quite hidden in the dark alleyways of the city ran from his vehicle and looked upon the scene. This happened to bring back some very disturbing memories from quite awhile back. He then had an idea he couldn’t pass up.
He ran towards Natarii, crying. His long coat flapping in the wind. His face awfully familiar.
“My daughter! Please don’t tell me that that’s my poor daughter!” He began to sob madly, but at the same time, was quite satisfied at how he had got these people to believe that she was really his daughter. His plan might actually work.
Luckily most of the people did not know him, but there was one person who did, who simply thought, “I didn’t know that he had a daughter.”
He never used to feel this way, but there was something good about the timing of Natarii’s arrival. The paramedics were there, but it was already too late for much. She was still breathing, but not well enough to be helped.
When most of the people left, realizing they were almost late for the train, it was just the man, the paramedics, and maybe three or four bystanders. “Sir, I’m so sorry but…” The paramedic stuttered as he looked in horror at what was behind him. A dog. It was a large robotic dog. He screamed as it pounced on top of him, but the other man took a run for it back to his hiding spot in the alley, but with Natarii in his arms. The paramedic, and the others of his profession, were out cold.
When Natarii had gotten some sense of consciousness, she found herself in the passenger’s seat of a fancy automobile, leaning against someone’s shoulder. He looked down at her and she became shocked. Actually, she was very shocked. “Doctor T…” “You are Dr.Tenma!” She passed out for what would appear to be the last time.

It was dark on this side of the city. This, the industrial side, was where the two ended up. There weren’t many people around here, just maintenance robots doing work to ensure the humans to be happy and free of such labor.
This day would be a few after Natarii’s accident in the main part of Metro City. A child and a man were walking down the stairs of an abandoned building.
“Father,” someone said, “Where does this so-and-so live? Who are you talking about?”
“Ask ‘Can Astro come out to play?’ Not too hard, is it?”
“Can you take me there, father?” “I believe I will need to do that.” He smiled, and then muttered, “This works perfectly.”
Having caught the child’s attention, she said, “Father, what plan?”
He just walked in silence toward his automobile, and motioned for the child to follow. She skipped along, but tripped over a small pothole. Suddenly, she remembered something.

“Daddy, what’s wrong with this road?” a nine year old girl said as they drove back home in the winter…
The thought ended just as quickly as it happened, and the girl and her father were driving towards a more residential side of the city.
“Father, is that all that I ask, if he wants to play with me? I don’t even know who he is!” She looked up at him and made a very funny looking face. “And…” She asked, “I don’t recall you ever calling me by my name! What is it? Please tell me father!”
He looked at her and continued driving, for he did not know her name.
They drove for awhile, passing many different buildings. The girl looked out of the window and looked around. “The sky is very beautiful today, don’t you think?” He just kept driving until they finally reached their destination. “Oh father, I have seen this house before! I remember its weird architectural style!
He began to look very angry, and yelled at the girl, “You have never been away from home in your life!” She backed away and opened the door of the automobile.
“Sorry father, I guess I haven’t.”
“Goodbye.” She said, and he drove away, kicking up some dust that hid the girl from the rows of houses. Well, at least until it disappeared.
She began to walk, her orange hair shining in the sun, her eyes the beautiful blue of a sunny day. She was wearing a blue jacket, and a matching skirt decorated with three large cobalt colored buttons.
“What should I say…? Oh. Now I remember.” She began thinking of who could answer the door as she walked slowly up the stairs connected to a patio.
As she reached the door, she hesitated to knock at first. “Might as well get over my anxiousness.” KNOCK KNOCK KNOCK!
She heard voices inside the house… “BIG BROTHER! GET THE DOOR!” “Maybe you should get it… For once.”
Footsteps neared the door, and it was flung open. “Hello! Wait… Do I know you?”
The girl stood still, as her blue eyes displayed a rather (along with her face) a confused expression. She thought hard. “You don’t know me, but I know who you are! Your name is… Uran, isn’t it?”
“You know me, YAAY!” She began to dance in the doorway, then turned around and made a very bizarre face.
“Big brother, I have a fan! Come and look!”
Yet again… Footsteps…
“You’re Astro, aren’t you? My father told me to ask you if you could come and play with me. Can you? Please?”
“Uran, she looks like the girl on the news from three days ago.” He looked at her more closely, and then reached out for her hand. She just stared at him.
“What’s wrong?” He said as she touched her hand. Her eyes appeared to be on the verge of crying.
“But I thought…” He said, as he felt her hand, “That the girl in the accident…”She looked into his eyes. “Was human.”
She turned around, and ran as fast as she could, but she could hear him call her.
“Come back!” He said to her. “I didn’t mean to hurt your feelings!”
Something came back to her as she ran, “Natarii, let’s see who gets to the swings first!” Whoever Natarii was, she ran fast, her hair swept back, across the playground…
Some people on the sidewalks looked as she fell to the ground, crying. Or something like that.
“So that’s my name… Natarii. Why couldn’t father tell me?!”
She suddenly felt someone’s hands on her shoulders. “I’m sorry,” He said, as she looked up at him.
She woke up somewhere else.

“Doctor, is there something you could do to help her? She says her name is Natarii, but I don’t think she’s too sure of it.”
“Let me look. Astro, is she okay? How long has she been here?”
“I think… for about eight hours now.”
Dr. Ochanomizu went ahead with pulling some bed sheets off her face.
“Natarii, it’s time to wake up now.” She opened her eyes. She pretty much saw only the doctor, with white puffy hair and a big nose.
Uran, who was standing behind her brother, said, “Astro, she’s kinda cute, but still not more than me!”
Natarii, or whoever she was, looked up at the three of them and began to softly cry to herself. She held the blankets tight in her hand.
“You said your father sent you here,” Dr. Ochanomizu told Natarii, “Well… Who is he?”
“Do you have some paper?” she said, “I’ll draw him for you.”
Uran ran to her room and came back with a notebook and a small box of crayons.
“Does this help?” She said as she sat them down next to Natarii.
“Of course it does. Thank you very much.” Natarii flipped open the book to a blank page. She began to draw with a black crayon, an outline of her “Father”. She then went in with details, dark brown hair, a long beard, his eyes, and even the clothes he was wearing the last time she saw him. She then, drew someone else. A girl. Holding his hand…
“Natarii, he’s not your father! That’s… Dr. Tenma?” Dr. Ochanomizu held the drawing very close to look at, as if he couldn’t believe what it had shown.
“Uh huh… He is my father, he even told me so… But he didn’t even know my name.” She looked at Astro and raised her finger, as to point at him.
“Yes, Astro, he’s yours too…”
“How did… How do you know that?”
“Father told me I had a brother. He said his name was…”
“Tobio” They both said together.
“And you look like him too.”
“Anyways,” Dr. Ochanomizu said, changing the subject, “There was a report about abduction at the sight of that accident the other day, but would he have… Taken a child he didn’t know?”
“That’s not true!” Natarii shouted. She jumped from the bed where she was laying and looked around. The walls were blue, with a pattern of space rockets and stars sandwiched between two off-white stripes. She tripped and fell on the floor.
“Are you okay?” Someone held out a hand. Looking up, she saw it was Astro.
She stood up, and hugged him as tight as she could.
“Can you help me… Please?! I have no friends and I am sad.” She looked at him, and he said back,
“Of course I will.”
Dr. Ochanomizu called her over. “Natarii, I’ll need to take a look at you… Is that okay?”
“Yes Doctor.” She said.
He grabbed her arm. “Well, you’re obviously a robot.”
“I am?” Natarii said quietly.


NOTE!!! Livonia is an actual city, as is Harrison is an actual street!
Natarii is pronounced, "Na-Ta-Ree", NOT to be pronounced like Atari! :lol:

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Postby astro_mcfly » 20 years ago

I can also post pictures of my own characters, Natarii, Dr.Mockingbird, (maybe later) etc.
It would be nice to make this in manga format. If I have time. Or I could get some help... Either way, just wanted to let you all know! :D

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Postby dannavy85 » 20 years ago

(clapping) awesome story!
"You guys have some serious Mommy issues."

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Postby astro_mcfly » 20 years ago

:o Are you serious?!? Yaaaaaaay! :D

[Edit!] The automobile in the story is a 1958 MGA. I highly doubt a picture is wanted, but if so, I will post one. B)
Anyways, is anybody interested in helping me with a manga format of this? Yes, I know it's unfinished work so far, but I could use a bit of assistance. (I'm still in school! ;) All I need to know is how to put this into a presentable mode. :D

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Postby astro_mcfly » 20 years ago

Hello! I'm back now. Just wondering how many have read this? It doesn't matter, but I think that it's counting when I veiw this topic. (it meaning the "viewed" colomn next to the topic name)

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Postby jeffbert » 20 years ago

Originally posted by astro_mcfly@Sep 30 2005, 09:20 PM
:o Are you serious?!? Yaaaaaaay! :D

[Edit!] The automobile in the story is a 1958 MGA. I highly doubt a picture is wanted, but if so, I will post one. B)
Anyways, is anybody interested in helping me with a manga format of this? Yes, I know it's unfinished work so far, but I could use a bit of assistance. (I'm still in school! ;) All I need to know is how to put this into a presentable mode. :D

I read your story, & must ask if you first wrote an outline, or if you just made it up as you went along? If you have an outline or at least an idea of how the story will end, please tell me. I do not claim to know how to write stories, but I am a college graduate & have studied literature.
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Postby astro_mcfly » 20 years ago

I had a little bit of a clue what I was writing, but some of it was made up as I wrote it.
I'll think about how it should end. To me, that's really the hardest part. (Endings, that is.)

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Postby jeffbert » 20 years ago

Originally posted by astro_mcfly@Oct 2 2005, 05:19 PM
I had a little bit of a clue what I was writing, but some of it was made up as I wrote it.
I'll think about how it should end. To me, that's really the hardest part. (Endings, that is.)

I ask, because if you want help, having an outline or an idea of how it ends might simplify the process. Do you have a clear idea about the characters, their histories, relationships, etc (Granted, I only saw one new character)? B)
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Postby astro_mcfly » 20 years ago

My ideas of the characters are very clear. I can even post some pictures of mine.
(Granted, I only saw one new character)? B)


Had you already known of one of them? There was Natarii (seen in previous art) and Dr. Mockingbird. Of course, I can always write a little on either of them, so a little bit more of their past is known.

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Postby jeffbert » 20 years ago

Originally posted by astro_mcfly@Oct 2 2005, 05:33 PM
My ideas of the characters are very clear. I can even post some pictures of mine.
[b](Granted, I only saw one new character)?  B)


Had you already known of one of them? There was Natarii (seen in previous art) and Dr. Mockingbird. Of course, I can always write a little on either of them, so a little bit more of their past is known. [/b]

I refer to the Astroboy characters. :lol:
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