Chapter 8: mind blowing
(I have edited out the profanity, & even cleaned up some grammar.-jeffbert)
Rayzor flew past at high speed making the same noise a fast jet fighter would, then some one with long yellow hair came up behind Acheron then knocked him out with one move, Acheron fell to the floor. Then the yellow haired person darted into the ground head first and pulled out kojack with one hand, then flew off to somewhere safe. To slowly put kojack on the ground, far away from the battle field, Kojack was hurt bad, he couldn’t move kojack opened one eye and saw the person who saved him with the long yellow hair fly off to the battle field, breaking the sound barrier. The yellow haired guy landed in front of Acheron, Rayzor took a good long look at the long haired person, and he jumped and said to him self.
“Ah! That’s bullet the strongest delta being alive…Ohh Acheron is going to get his ass kicked”
Acheron slowly got up but stopped in shock as he saw bullets feet, he looked up at his face and jumped up
“Ha-ha! Your scum bag bullet right? You’re #### to me #######, I will beat you and become most powerful on delta!”
Said Acheron grinning a pointing in bullet’s face, Acheron walked to behind bullet, then bullet elbowed him in the face and he went right around planet delta smashing into every thing in his path, to end up punched in the face again by bullet, as he came around the other side of the planet. Acheron stood there for a bit with bullet’s fist still pressed to his head, and then flopped down on the floor on bullet’s feet. Rayzor flew down in front of bullet
“Wow, how’d you do that? You took ‘im out with ease, you didn’t even move”
Said Rayzor in astonishment and looking up to him like he was a god, bullet looked down on little ten year old Rayzor. “Kid, Stand back… way back”
Said bullet looking down on rayzor, So rayzor jumped back about 800 feet back in one leap then darted really high up in the sky, to watch the battle from afar. Bullet put his hands together and closed his eyes and focused his energy to one spot, and then a big red aura appeared around him the aura was at-lest 30 feet high. The wind blew around bullet the clouds went dark and closed in; lightning began to fork out of the clouds. Acheron opened his eyes, and was wounding what was happening so he jumped up and saw what happening, he tried to counter bullets attack but it was to late, bullet let go of all the energy there was in three immense shock waves that wiped out every thing around bullet. Then the exploding began, and then there was a huge discharge of energy. Every thing went white, nobody could see anything. rayzor flew back another mile, nobody could see any thing it was to bright the noise was ear blowing, and it was like standing next to a nuclear bomb going off. But only this nuclear explosion could be seen from space. The whole of star city was shaking like there was an earthquake going on.
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jeffbert wrote:I have read ch. 8. I removed the profanity. Please do not use profanity, Sparx, this is a family-friendly forum. I also made a few corrections to the writing itself, in the area of grammar.
I have not read much between ch 1 & ch. 8, & therefore have no idea what ocuured in that space.
hmy: dam i forgot i put it there sorry i won't do it agine. profanity is a clever way to say it 
oh yeah, thanks for helping me with my grammar
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