Sight. [story]

[Denkou]

Reply to this...I'm not sure about it yet... I need feedback.

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Sight.
I can't see anything in this place. I can't even dream.
It’s dark here, and cold. There’s no light, but there are people, I can’t see them either, but they brush against me, I call out to them, but they don’t reply, only bump me and move on, their touch is like feathers, too light to really be people, but that’s what they are. I don’t know how I know.
And then there are the voices, they come from the depths of someplace, echoing, they're calling me, one way, and the other. The loudest ones call me forward, but they're unfamiliar voices, scary. The softer ones I recognize; my mother, my father, my sister. And some other ones, they're talking about things I don't understand, things like head trauma and collapsed lungs.
I want to go back to the softer ones, but my feet won’t move that way, only forward, forward is lighter, it gets brighter, but colder too. I still can’t see.
But now, not I can see something:
Me.
Lying on a bed, tubes running from my arms, legs and chest, bandaged from head to toe. I can see my family too, but only just. I cry out, reach for them as panic and understanding overwhelms me. I don’t want what’s happening, I know what’s happening; I spin, away from my parents and sibling. Away from the white bed, away from the world.
No, no, no! I scream silently as the darkness takes me again. No, no, no! I don’t want this; I’m not ready for this, not now!
I feel. Feel my legs and arms going cold as my surroundings for an instant, before glittering warmth glides up and down my terrified body, I shiver, I calm, as a light, an apparition of such beauty that it made my very soul tremble, reaches down and brushes away my tears, I sigh, I sleep, my sight dims…

In the hospital bed, a curtain is pulled, a cry of grief is heard, and a mind sends one last frantic signal to a failing heart before shutting down, a pool of sight dims, and a doctor’s solemn voice records:

“Time of death, 12.32 PM, 1998, November 21st…"

[jeffbert]

Creepy!

[tonigirl1000]

Denkou- the story is sad, wish death did not exist, i truly hope the apparition was an angel. thanks and hugs

[jeffbert]

I think that we might lose appreciation for life, if not for death making it finite. We need a grim reaper smiley.

[Denkou]

...
I AM THE GRIM REAPER SMILY.
>DDD
-takes joo all into teh long tunnel with the light at the end-

[tonigirl1000]

Life is too precious not to appreciate, thanks and hugs.

[Denkou]

D'awww lighten up Toni. -tackleshug-
-picks joo up and bounces you around like a basketball-
...
-is completly and utterly I.N.S.A.N.E-

[tonigirl1000]

HI- Denkou, hope we will be friends, thanks and hugs.
PS- I love to have fun but i also have a serious side, thanks

[Denkou]

You are also a very good basketball. -nod-

[tonigirl1000]

No- please i take this very serious, life is too precious........

I feel neither native or alien to this world, i know i care and regret not having the power to protect those i love and the other inhabitants of this world orbiting a star orbiting this galaxy known as the "small Andromeda Galaxy"- Toni