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Astro looked at Dr. O'Shay, his sad wide eyes observing him carefully. "TOBIO!!!", yelled Dr. Tenma. Tenma turned to O'Shay, furious. O'Shay's heart missed a bit, but watching the little robot, he carefully approached him, and told him gently, "Astro, Astro... I know you have not forgotten me... we lived so many adventures together!" Astro did not know what to think, but it triggered a feeling inside him...
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"I - I..." he began, but an electrical pain seared in his head. Astro grabbed both side of his temples. "I... remember now," he managed to sputter, leading himself away from Tenma's coax. Despite the jolts of pain he felt, Astro found the courage to...
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Run to Dr. O'shae. He grabbed O'shae tight but was careful not to hurt him. The pain surged through him he gribbed to the doctor as he slowly started to fall to his knees. "Save me from him doctor" Astro muttered as he began to black out "Please make the pain go away" Astro started to cry out. "Please stop Tenma you gave me kokoro you cant just take it away!" Astro screamed as he was laying on the ground holding his head. Tenma didn't like to see Astro in so much pain, he would never wish that on his creation so he...
"atoms_gf" wrote:When will the winner be declairedX.X
"Gotta Love ASTRO BOY" wrote:When the stories over duh
Now, now! Not all the stories have come to an end so far.

I also hereby declare that if too much time goes on between new posts we must use the suspense theme "don don dddoonn!" as a single post to remind the team of superb fiction writers!
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I'm fine with your suggestion, Novacain. I'm a bad fiction writer though so I'm not sure I want to be the one ending this story, I'm afraid I'll spoil it, which would pain me because it's a good one...
I'll give it a try though.. If it's not right add something!
.... felt something good inside him, a feeling he had not felt in years. He recognized that as his love for Tobio. His hard feelings melted, and, remorseful, he opened Astro's chest, pressed a few buttons, and Astro opened his eyes to recognize both of his fathers.
[I kind of want to hide under my desk, lol!
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"Gotta Love ASTRO BOY" wrote:Run to Dr. O'shae. He grabbed O'shae tight but was careful not to hurt him. The pain surged through him he gribbed to the doctor as he slowly started to fall to his knees. "Save me from him doctor" Astro muttered as he began to black out "Please make the pain go away" Astro started to cry out. "Please stop Tenma you gave me kokoro you cant just take it away!" Astro screamed as he was laying on the ground holding his head. Tenma didn't like to see Astro in so much pain, he would never wish that on his creation so he...
.... felt something good inside him, a feeling he had not felt in years. He recognized that as his love for Tobio. His hard feelings melted, and, remorseful, he opened Astro's chest, pressed a few buttons, and Astro opened his eyes to recognize both of his fathers.
[I kind of want to hide under my desk, lol!

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Ahh thats a great ending
ps the only thing fiction writing really takes is imagination and a alot of detail and you seem good at that 


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"Astro Forever" wrote:I'm fine with your suggestion, Novacain. I'm a bad fiction writer though so I'm not sure I want to be the one ending this story, I'm afraid I'll spoil it, which would pain me because it's a good one...I'll give it a try though.. If it's not right add something!
No way! That's perfect. The only difference is I would have made it so a glitch in Astro shorted out something in Tenma's brain and he would have been dancing around like a rooster on caffeine. But you know me...

"Gotta Love ASTRO BOY" wrote:Ahh thats a great endingps the only thing fiction writing really takes is imagination and a alot of detail and you seem good at that
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I agree, you have a very good style of language art!
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